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Old Nov 4, 2005, 10:41am Default Shadows Of An Empire
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Shadows of An Empire


By David Gonzalez Rivera



Prologue

As the sun rises, a kingdom burn into ashes, people screaming, the soldiers in desperation trying to locate the enemy. But those who doesn't know the power of darkness does not know were to locate them. Not even the mightiest heroes could find this so called enemy. The king Alxen cowardly run far away, where he found a cave to hide, from far away he saw the flames consuming his castle, his people dying, the smell of burnt blood in the soft air of the night. Everything destroyed. He who knows the truth of what happened, he whose lust is dark and greed. Those who believe in the dark lord knows the kind of destructive power.

It was time to get up, time to visit the ruins, time to cry in desperation of the people who died. To join my people, to join the pain and the suffer. He will pay. I swear in the name of my ancestors. Alxen got up and walked out of the cave to see the light of the sun. He fell to his knees to see a nightmare. A nightmare where he lost everything.

He went back to the cave, with tears in his eyes, grabbed his crown. Ashamed of his action, of running like a coward, leaving his people. He looked at it, raged he was. He dropped the crown and when back to his beloved kingdom.

As he entered the place where he was born, where he was made king, where he run away like a coward, was totally destroyed. The villagers looked at him with a shame, they glared, they death wished, they whispered “coward�. There were survivors, and some of the houses were still intact. He went to the town square. The glorious statue of his ancestor was in pieces. A man who wasn't so tall yelled “Why did you left us king Alxen, did you not believe in us?�.

His heart was pacing fast, he faced the cruel truth, “Let us rebuild this kingdom, and revenge our beloved people who lost their live in the Damned Night�.

One of the knights sitting, stood up, “My king, I will lend you my services as knight, I swear in the name of this kingdom to protect it with my life�. Alxen looked at him and nodded.

“It is time to rebuild what we lost, and seek the person who did this.� said Alxen, he knew who did it, he knew why.

There was a roar, a roar of hope.

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Okay so I was bored and I opened OpenOffice, I started to get some ideas and I came up with this , hope you like it!, my bad if you notice some grammar errors
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Old Nov 4, 2005, 03:21pm Default
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Nice, good job .. you should also publish this on writershangout man!
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Nice, good job .. you should also publish this on writershangout man!
I was just about say the same

Good job, I bet WH would love to give you a real review, though
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Heh, i liked it.
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ahh thanks for the feedback :d
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Nice read! And the grammar errors are "correctible".

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thanks Dave! ^_^
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